dsheinem wrote:So they encouraged me to just post the brief follow up I wrote in the comments of the original article and they'd try to highlight it/bring it towards the top. If you are interested, here it is:
dsheinem wrote:So they encouraged me to just post the brief follow up I wrote in the comments of the original article and they'd try to highlight it/bring it towards the top. If you are interested, here it is:
Tip: Stop starting almost every sentence with "I". You're not a jerk by any means, but it makes you come off as self important.
And, well, it is your article, but a retort that is only "seems to be" focused on you comes off badly.
Only trying to help, I promise. You know I love ya.
I mean no offense, Luke, but I don't really think I need any writing advice from you. Given the tone of the follow up comment as a whole, which addresses all the questions which were directed toward my own personal experience, the first person and the frequent use of "I" was certainly called for.
dsheinem wrote: I mean no offense, Luke, but I don't really think I need any writing advice from you. Given the tone of the follow up comment as a whole, which addresses all the questions which were directed toward my own personal experience, the first person and the frequent use of "I" was certainly called for.
I didn't read any of the comments, only yours. I have an MA in English from an accredited University, as well as an MBA. I think you might be jumping the gun to think you couldn't learn something from me. I also thought your article could have used some polishing.
dsheinem wrote: I mean no offense, Luke, but I don't really think I need any writing advice from you. Given the tone of the follow up comment as a whole, which addresses all the questions which were directed toward my own personal experience, the first person and the frequent use of "I" was certainly called for.
I didn't read any of the comments, only yours. I have an MA in English from an accredited University, as well as an MBA. I think you might be jumping the gun to think you couldn't learn something from me. I also thought your article could have used some polishing.
^ See how that comes off as pretentious?
I've earned a PhD, published in popular and academic presses, taught undergraduate courses in composition, and edit, read, and write for a very significant portion of my professional career...
Fuck it, no need for cock measuring.
I iz sorry you thought mine's essay needed polishing, please let I know how to writze bettor anz I will soak up the nowledge you dole out, sensei.
At what point should I consider My Stop Smoking Coach for Nintendo DS "beaten"?
Respectfully Yours, Blu
Pretty sure that's an example of one with no "ending" to the game itself, right? Some games can't be beaten - but that doesn't mean they can't be enjoyed.
